Hi my name is Jedi, in Kauri class we have been writing recounts about the holidays. I wrote about Lauren’s 10th birthday party. Her party happened at Mega Air. I had lots of fun at Mega Air and lauren’s house. Here is my recount...
Thursday, October 20, 2016
Laurens birthday
Hi my name is Jedi, in Kauri class we have been writing recounts about the holidays. I wrote about Lauren’s 10th birthday party. Her party happened at Mega Air. I had lots of fun at Mega Air and lauren’s house. Here is my recount...
It all started on saturday the 8th of october Billie, Ella, Holly, Bryar, Sasha, Lauren Rihanna and I went to Mega Air for Laurens birthday party. When I got there I was greeted by Billie, her mum lauren and mum.
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I enjoyed the extra detail that you added to your recount, Jedi. By doing this, you created a picture in my mind of what you were doing. You have organised your thinking very well - I can tell that you enjoy writing.
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Thank you for sharing your recount Jedi. You obviously paid good attention to the safety video. What was a piece of advice that you learnt from the safety video? Is Mega Air just for children?
ReplyDeletei look forward to your next blog post.
Kia Ora Jedi,
ReplyDeleteMy name is Kylah and I am a Room Five student from Awahono School. I like your writing about Lauren's Birthday. I like the way you were very specific. It sounded like you guys had a lot of fun.