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Monday, August 1, 2016

The quest to treasure island




"This is my story that I had made on storybird 

it is about a boy named Liam who was sent on a quest but I can't just tell you  the whole story now why don't you read it and find out yourself." Hope you enjoy! 

2 comments:

  1. This is a great read, Jedi. You are using juicy words and phrases to make your story more interesting and the words go really well with the pictures. I am looking forward to your next creation.

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  2. What an amazing beginning to your story Jedi I was hooked in by the end of the first page. I love the sentence on page 5: 'he found refuge beneath an oak tree.' Do you wonder why the King was sitting on the wharf? I wonder if being a King had made him tired and he was in need of a quiet rest.

    I look forward to your next blog post.

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